My eyes are open to the shade of the tree, how the roots run deep into the ground, how the grass comes to a stop once it reaches the hot pavement. A pathway that is full of chewed gum, dirt and cracks, a path that has been walked on by people with big dreams and people with small dreams. A pathway that has been walked on by many different races and a pathway that people with all different lives and stories have walked on. a pathway were not one footstep is the same as another, a pathway that will hopefully lead us to our future.
"Life is a beach and i am just playing in the sand." - Lil Wayne.
I really liked how you were repeating. You capture so many different views about a pathway and it doesn't limit out anyone. It really stuck to me how much a simple path is what really starts people off and leads them to their dreams.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you made a pathway so much more than it actually is. My favorite sentence about the pathway was, pathway were not one footstep is the same as another, a pathway that will hopefully lead us to our future. I like this because i just loved the way you worded. Great job i loved the piece you wrote!
ReplyDeleteThat was very pleasing to read. I enjoyed the repetition and smooth word flow. And of course, the quote at the end. Very good mate.
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